Hey David,

It's looking pretty good. I think perhaps the headline and sub headline could use a little tweaking, only in that when I read the headline I don't really visualize what kind of music you make. You might work on those descriptive terms a bit. I assume it's electronic based on the keyboard in the image, which helps. But you really want to snag a pre-existing interest with your copy, and right now I'm not personally seeing that in the language.

And for me the fact that you say that your family and friends call you "Dave show" makes you sound sort of small time to me. You might try something more like "Hey there. My name is David.  A.K.A, Dave Show. And right now, I am offering up three of my latest singles for FREE!".

Sales page looks good.

Of course all of this is just one guy's opinion. Testing is all that will tell you for sure. Hope that helps.

Yeah, I think that's much better. Now I have a very precise idea of what you sound like. That's what you want. But ultimately testing will tell you everything.

And I get what you mean about feeling small time, but don't undersell yourself. Don't oversell yourself either. But you want to come off as pro. Only thing I'd do is add a comma after Dave. As in "Dave, AKA Dave Show." Otherwise it reads as one long and confusing name

Good job with the improvements.