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2:05 am
August 29, 2017
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QuoteWhew!! Lesson 14 was a nice workout, John!
I thought I’d celebrate completing this session by sharing my sales page and asking for some feedback from John, Steve, and anyone of my fellow learners who’d like to pitch in. (I’m happy to reciprocate at any time!)
Here’s my sales page for your feedback, which benefits heavily from John’s excellent tutorial.
I’d love to know what y’all think!
Cheers,
Dr. Pelè
2:51 am
June 7, 2011
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I think it looks and reads pretty well. The only things that caught my eye (and these were really minor) were...
1. The fact that you broke up the album name and the price into two lines just creates a lot of space that I'm not sure if I love. I might try combining those somehow, or do something to just make that big headline block a tad more attractive.
2. In your supporting paragraph where you make the big call to action and ask people to buy, it felt to me that you should mention the price again so I really understand what you are asking me to do.
Otherwise I thought it was pretty good.
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3:10 am
August 29, 2017
OfflineWow!! Great feedback, John!
I've incorporated EVERYTHING you've suggested, and I think it works.
LOVING this course!
4:17 am
June 7, 2011
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Happy to help. I think it's looking better. One small thing - and this is just my personal opinion... To help it look less cluttered what if you added actual quotes instead of commas or single quotes (or whatever those are called) around the album title and then a hyphen before the price.
So it looked like...
GET A COPY OF DR. PELÈ’S LATEST MOTIVATIONAL ALBUM, "I GOT HAPPY" - FOR JUST $9.95!
Having trouble with your marketing? Wish you could have an experienced direct-to-fan marketing expert look over your actual campaigns, music, or content and offer feedback? Or perhaps you’re just looking for a little one-on-one assistance so you can ask questions that pertain to your specific goals and get a second, more experienced, perspective? Click here to book a session with me now.
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