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BLOG POST #1- My Draft- Looking for Feedback...
December 1, 2017
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 Hey John and everyone-

I've just finished my first draft of Blog Post #1. I stole the ending from John and will probably finesse that a bit to make it my own . The whole thing is about the same length as Johns Blog 1- maybe a touch longer.

I'm open to any and all constructive feedback. Thanks!

Matt

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From Rock Star in a Car to ….Karaoke Bar?
 
It was a cold, dark week in January and I was stranded back in my hometown of Montreal. We’re talking icycles-on-your-eyelashes cold.
 
I’d been visiting family over New Years and had botched my paperwork. When I stepped up to immigration on my way back to NYC, the customs guy looked down at my jumble of papers, looked back up at me with blank eyes, shook his head, and sent me back out into the frigid morning. Better luck next time, kid. Life lesson number one: US customs is no joke and being a polite and wide-eyed Canadian, plus a dollar, will buy you a pack of gum. 
 
A little backstory: I’d recently graduated from McGill (in Montreal) and had been living in Manhattan for a few months, interning for a controversial and well-known filmmaker.  The internship was exciting but inside I felt haunted by this feeling that I wasn’t doing what I was supposed to be doing with my life.  Truth is I’d felt this way for years. Whenever I wrestled with these big what-am-I-gonna-do-with-my-life questions, I’d fall into a fog of confusion and angst. As a way of coping, I developed this ritual- starting at about 18 or 19- of borrowing my parents' car and driving around aimlessly at night for hours, singing myself hoarse to U2 bootlegs. Kinda like a solo version of Carpool Karaoke. 
 
Now, let me make this clear: I was super embarrassed about this and would have been mortified had any of my friends or family caught me in the act. “Why" is a whole other conversation but suffice it say I kept the whole thing secret. I’m not sure I even understood it myself. All I knew was that my life felt like a confusing mess except when I was alone in that car, music blaring, singing my lungs out in a concert to no one. Somehow, that was the one thing that made me feel connected and alive. 
 
The formula can be distilled as follows:
 
Post-college angst + alienation x a desperate desire to express my true self and be fully seen and heard divided bysheer terrorat being exposed =rock star in a car. 
 
So…I’m stranded in Montreal. Looks like my paperwork will take about a week to sort out. The 3rd night in I get a call from my friend Mike inviting me out with a bunch of guys to Peel Pub- a sports bar-slash-watering hole for the college and post-college crowd. Sports bars are not really my thing and the beer at Peel Pub is basically cow piss. Plus, it’s cold out enough to freeze the balls off a brass monkey.  Still, I’ve got bad cabin fever and the idea of another night at home with my folks watching Larry King is pretty depressing. I throw on a leather jacket, Mike picks me up, and we head down to the pub. I spend most of the ride trying not to shiver. 
 
We arrive onto the massive bar floor and spot our crew- about a dozen scruffy looking guys at a long table in the corner, already crammed with pitchers of beer, plates of wings, and some pretty busted looking poutine - a French-Canadian 'delicacy’ consisting of fries, cheese curds, and gravy. The stuff of hangovers and stomach aches. It’s kind of a who’s-who. There’s Jeff and Dave. And the other Dave. And Eric and Stephen and a bunch of their friends. Lots of guys I haven’t seen in a while. It’s a happy reunion and hugs all around.
 
Turns out another feature of this particular evening at the Peel Pub is… wait for it….live band karaoke. I glance over my shoulder and see a bunch of scraggly haired, tattooed dudes setting up their gear on a stage at the far end. One of the Daves has already devised a drinking game and divided us into teams. To raise the stakes, it's decided that the losing team will have to offer up one of their own to the karaoke gods. My heart skips a beat. Long story shorter, my team loses and - riding on liquid courage - I don’t refuse when I’m chosen to take the karaoke bullet. 
 
I amble over to the stage and huddle with the band. They have a couple of U2 songs in their repertoire: "Where the Streets Have No Name" and “One.” I’ve sung both of these songs in my car countless times but this is the first time I’m singing them..or anything for that matter...with an actual band. The drummer counts in the first song and we’re off to the races.
 
The next 10 minutes are a total blur as I experience what can only be described as an out-of-body experience. I sing like like my life depends on it, with every ounce of passion I can summon, free of self-consciousness, just totally letting it rip. Pretty soon, I notice that a hush seems to have fallen over the room - people are really listening.  
 
We finish the second song with a big crescendo, there’s a moment of quiet and...the room erupts. It’s overwhelming. I thank the band and stagger, shell-shocked, back to my friends like I’m walking with someone else’s feet.  Strangers are smiling at me and shaking my hand. My friends greet me with a combination of back slaps, high-fives, woot-woots, looks of confusion and…dare I say…newfound respect? A waitress arrives with fresh pitchers of beer courtesy of the bar manager.  It’s glorious and humbling.
 
Fast forward a couple of decades, 4-plus albums,  songs featured on TV shows like Melrose Place, some unexpected success in the world of EDM - to say nothing of countless diversions and heartbreaks - and that night still resonates with me. It was the moment when my fantasy life broke through into my waking reality and I got some indication from the universe that a creative life might actually be possible for me.
 
But the most important realization that night was that it’s YOU, the listener, that makes all of it matter. 
I look forward to many more sometimes-hard, sometimes-ugly, always-worthwhile experiences along this musical journey. Here’s to hoping that you are part of that journey.
If you’d like to hear the most recent milestone of that journey, click here to listen to my most recent EP, “Rockaway Girl."
Thank you for being a listener and for making it all matter.
December 3, 2017
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Hey Matt,

I think it reads really well and is very well written. The only thing I think it could do a bit better is drive home a little more of the USP and or a narrative.

What I get from this is that you are from Canada, and you have a reverence for music. Those are cool things and the story is told well so it resonates. I guess my question would be, what is your USP and does this serve you in driving that home. I may very well but I just am not clear what it is from reading this alone.

If I read this I probably would want to continue engaging because it's heartfelt. But if I was to walk away and describe to a friend I would basically say, He's a Canadian musician. Is there any USP that this compliments? It doesn't have to be overt. It may just be that you are a sort of sensitive Canadian songwriter (which is the feeling I get reading this). If you are something else you want to make sure that is represented in the post. If that is your USP then I think the post is great.

Sorry, if that;s a bit of a rambly answer. Hope it makes sense.

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December 4, 2017
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Hey John-

Thanks so much for the feedback. Yeah, I totally get what you're saying. I wasn't even thinking in terms of the USP and you make a great point.

Do either of these paint a picture?

VOCALIST WHO MAKES STIRRING, ATMOSPHERIC INDIE-POP SHOWCASING HIS SENSUOUSLY EMOTIONAL SINGING STYLE AND SEARCHING, CINEMATIC LYRICS.

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INDIE ELECTRO-POP FEATURING SENSUAL, SEARCHING VOCALS AND LYRICS FULL OF CINEMATIC IMAGERY THAT MELDS SLEEK RADIO HOOKS WITH STIRRING ATMOSPHERICS.

I don't think my USP is at odds with my story but my music /voice does have an element of mystery and dark sensuality (i.e. not just another sensitive Canadian songwriter!)  

I'm just not sure how- or where- to weave that in without distracting from the story.

Any suggestions??

Matt

December 4, 2017
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Hey Matt,

I think those descriptors sound a bit to creative and full of prose rather than being language that real people would actually use. Those could possibly make good headlines more than USPs, which are ultimately just for you to help with brand development.

I wrote this article for MMM members because I had so many people doing the same thing after going through the branding lessons. Let me know if this doesn't help: http://www.musicmarketingmanif.....-any-good/

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December 4, 2017
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Is this any better?

Montreal-born vocalist and songwriter based in NYC who makes dark-yet-still-approachable pop and delivers it with lots of conviction and sensuality- kinda like the 3am version of Coldplay if they stopped taking Prozac.

December 5, 2017
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Hey Matt,

Yeah, I think that's a lot better. While it doesn't spell out any one element that is overly unique, it does do a good job of setting up some basic parameters for your brand. But all in all I think you're doing an impressive job of taking the feedback on board and making appropriate changes.

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December 5, 2017
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Thanks so much John:-) I feel like I'm beginning to get a handle on this...

2 more follow-up questions and I think I'm good to go:

1) Re: Your comment "While it doesn’t spell out any one element that is overly unique, it does do a good job of setting up some basic parameters for your brand."  What are the kinds of the things/ elements that might make it more unique? Can you give an example or two? I'd love to tease out my USP a little more get it really banging but I'm just not entirely clear on what's missing. 

2) Earlier in the thread you suggested the my Blog Post while well written, wasn't making my USP clear. Can you suggest 1 or 2 ways I might integrate that without breaking the flow or sounding too market-y? Is it more on the level of an offhand remark?

THANKS!!!

Matt

December 5, 2017
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Hey Matt,

It wasn't just an offhand remark, the idea here is that you define your USP for you, so you know what it is that you are actually selling. Because in order for this stuff to work you need to create that shortcut to the mind, so that if a person comes across your content they very quickly "get it" and become able to not only communicate what is special about you to themselves, but also to others. My feeling is that if that doesn't exist, then the marketing will be a challenge. Once you are able to wrap up what you do into a nice little package, the marketing becomes just a matter of shining a spotlight on your act and driving traffic through a buying process. 

When I said I didn't really feel that the USP was clear, I meant I simply didn't walk away from that thinking, "this guy is special in this way". In fact, as you pointed out, my assumption was somewhat wrong, in that I assumed you were a sensitive singer songwriter type. If I like sensitive singer songwriters I'd continue to engage and then possibly be let down when I hear more of the music. If I like darker stuff (like what you actually make) I might be turned off and miss out. I'm over simplifying it, but that's the reasoning behind the remarks.

The USP is simply the Unique Selling Proposition. It's the thing that makes you different from the millions of other artists out there and it's the reason I should pay attention. Sometimes it's profound. IE, Steve Vai is one of the best guitar players in the world. And sometimes it's more quaint, IE Jewel is a female Alaskan singer songwriter who lived out of her van.

Other examples might be (and these are my words, not necessarily something the world would agree on):

Bob Dylan is a folk/rock artist who introduced Intellect to rock and roll.

Beck is an eclectic modern Dylan who made music with a leaf blower.

The Velvet Underground is to music what Andy Warhol is to art.

The New York Dolls play with gender and mix punk rock with a trashy drag exterior.

 

Those artists all have very strong USPs (things that make them unique) and so it's easy.  Sometimes it could be as bland and simple as "sensitive singer songwriter". But let's say your USP was "sensitive singer songwriter", by knowing that you know what needs to be expressed in your content, imagery, production, etc. I want to look at that album cover and see some cross-processed washed out photo of you playing your guitar. I want your blog post to make reference to being a singer songwriter, and your commentary to be deep and sensitive. Does that all make sense? 

The USP concept is not some big massive idea. It's just the "rule of your universe" and everything you do should be consistent with the USP, at least from a marketing standpoint. For many this will be intuitive, but I think it's an important exercise. 

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Aha. Yes yes this is all making sense. 

The piece I kinda wasn't getting before is that the USP is about more than just the sound/music. The "rule for the universe" idea is super helpful - that it may not be explicit but it ought to be implicit in everything I'm putting out. From the look and feel of my artwork and photos, to my sound, to the live show, to how I dress and talk in interviews, to the way I tell stories, to the stories I even choose to tell...

These elements should all work together synergistically and point to the same coherent USP in one way or another. Me being clear on the USP makes it much easier to do that. If I'm not, I may end up with something that feels vague or generic- or worse- really inconsistent/ confusing. 

Ok. Deep breath. Gonna digest this for a minute and see what comes. 

THANKS!!

Matt

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Awesome. And yep, you got it. You may say it point blank in your headline (but you may not), but being conscious of your USP is important because it helps you make the right choices with everything you do, from targeting, to album artwork, to the subject matter of your blog posts. It's basically a more precise way of defining your brand. "Brand" can be a bit airy fairy, where as a unique selling proposition is a precise statement.

Keep us posted on your progress.

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Will Do. Thanks!!

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Just a heads up that I moved this post to "general discussion" forum. It had been originally added to the "forum rules" forum. Just letting you know so you get the email alert and can find it again if looking for it.

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Cool .Thanks. Yeah, that was an accident. Just getting the hang of this:-)

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No worries at all 🙂

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